One Shot Wednesday–Monotone


21/365+1 [Dirty snow]

Image by The Hamster Factor via Flickr

Submitted to One Shot Wednesday: http://oneshotpoetry.blogspot.com/

 

Monotone

Staggering through a maze of words,
The poet gropes for one to fill the emptiness.

Dark skies obscure even the shadows as
monochromatic gray scales the horizon.

Flecks of asphalt sprinkle the once-white snow
heaped in mounds on the side of the road.

Remembrance of beauty fades, evades.
November dies with its dreams of loveliness and magic.

Winter doldrums stagger through a maze of words,
extinguish artistry,
ignite loneliness.

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30 thoughts on “One Shot Wednesday–Monotone

  1. Lu Ann says:

    Been there… writer illness 😦
    Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed the reading! Nice shot

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  2. suzicate says:

    the poet gropes for one to fill the emptiness…obviously written by a poet, one who knows that feeling, excellent.

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  3. Being a fellow poet, I understand this very well!

    😀

    retrieval

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  4. Shashi says:

    Ahh!! the poets world… so full of dilemmas and doubts of his/her own thoughts… I liked this one…

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  5. I liked the gradual movement of images… it was like I was being led through a scene through a moving lens – sharp images. And the final lines close it very well
    “extinguish artistry,
    ignite loneliness.”
    Very well done!

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  6. wkkortas says:

    The regularity in the pacing and the short, two-line stanzas act nicely to reinforce the notion of the gray sameness that is the all-too-familiar grind of November. It’s a nice example of how form and theme can work hand-in-hand.

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  7. Bodhirose says:

    Describes the time of year and dreary weather and the “dreariness” of searching for just the right combination of words to write. I felt this very clearly.

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  8. booguloo says:

    Cheer up! Things could be worse… so I cheered up… sure nuff… things got worse! Great title and poem.

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  9. Steve Isaak says:

    Superb representation of the poet’s verse-quest. Perfect.

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  10. i’m staggering now through a maze of words. i enjoyed yours…

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  11. brian says:

    i feel so alone right now…shivering…

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  12. Wonderful writing!

    cheers 🙂

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  13. Bravo. Well done. Feels just like this time of year.

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  14. Rather ironic this poem – ostensibly about despair at an inability to find the right words – whilst finding them expertly to portray that situation. Interesting.

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  15. trisha says:

    splendid. just like a beautiful painting on winter. very elegant and attractive.

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  16. Claudia says:

    yes- exactly how it feels sometimes…love the monochromatic gray scales …

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  17. Susannah says:

    “Winter doldrums stagger through a maze of words,”
    Wow, your words really sum up the feelings that some people get about Winter. Vivid imagery!

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  18. Artswebshow says:

    I like this poem.
    Well captured with your words

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  19. Kavita says:

    Aaahh.. that last stanza was simply brilliant!! But I soooo like winter..
    Did there really have to be sludge after snow??! Grr… 🙂 But then, these are just the whims of stupid li’l me!
    I think you have described it perfectly, Vic… And I really hope poetry outlasts somberness 🙂

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  20. Giovanni says:

    Wonderful piece…the poem reads in a sort of somber and monotone voice.

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  21. hope hayduk says:

    picture painted very well. Great imagery
    thank you

    and thank you for your visit and comment 🙂

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  22. hedgewitch says:

    I get those same feelings on and off all through winter. Winter in a city especially, where the cars turn the snow grey almost as it’s falling. Good mood piece, Victoria. You pulled a whole landscape, human and natural, into this.

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  23. Teresa says:

    What a vivid description of fall switching to winter. Nice one shot!

    Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/11/30/two-souls/

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  24. betweenhearts75 says:

    Truly fascinating…you tore from color from Autumn and pulled us into winter chill, definitely monotone…but beautiful too!! Wonderfully projected. ~April

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  25. Old Ollie says:

    Agreed, but let’s hope we can find some poetic moments this winter.

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  26. pauline says:

    You’ve captured the end of November in words.

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  27. What an interesting gray image your words weave in my mind! It’s also portrayed well by the photo from flicker… a good find! :o)

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  28. moondustwriter says:

    Love the empty / blase feeling that your words convey in this wonderful poem

    thanks for the One Shot

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