Monday Morning Writing Prompt–Superbowl or…?

Packers Huddle

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This is a repeat of a prompt I posted in August at the beginning of football season. As I mentioned then, I’m a secondary fan. That is to say, I knit or blog or make jewelry while “sort-of” watching the game. Here in the USA, most everyone is homing in on the Superbowl which will begin in a couple of hours (as I prepare this). For Monday’s prompt, how about a poem or short story about football or another sport of your choice, or one in which you use a sports metaphor. Have fun with this and please include the link in the comments to this post.

Here’s a short, short story I wrote a while back:


A medic squats beside the body.  Concern etches his face, communicating the serious status of his patient.  Sweat beads on his brow; he bites his lower lip.

The kid’s angular features distort into a painful grimace.  I can’t see blood, but tears roll from the corner of his eyes.  Lower extremities sprawl in an unnatural pose.  I wait for a sign of life in the useless appendages.

Doug’s mouth hangs open, his eyes fixed on the screen of our new television.

“For this, we got HDTV?”  I hurl the question into the unresponsive room.

In the upper left hand corner of the screen, I view a group of fellow warriors.  Huddled in the cold, their breath escapes in wisps of fog.  Arms encircle their frozen torsos; they slap themselves, teasing chilled blood into warmth, luring it to the surface.  A surgeon’s suturing a scarlet laceration on a young black face.

Another group of guys trot out from base camp, bearing a stretcher.  I watch them logroll the boy in the field, carefully immobilizing his neck.  I wonder if he’s going to make it, or if he’ll spend his days imprisoned in his flaccid husk-of-a-body.

“It’s all about money, isn’t it?” I ask Doug.

“Of course it is.  Everything we do is about money,” he answers and takes a slug of beer.

“So why do they try to pan it off as some ideal?” I ask.

“It is about ideals.  It’s about freedom and courage.  And heroes.  We need our heroes.”

“So, some poor mother sacrifices her son for some obscure objective?  Some American pipedream.”

“It’s not just about our country, Rachel.  You know that.  The whole world’s watching.”  Doug clutches a handful of chips and shoves them in his mouth.  He continues, “We’ve got to let them know who’s in charge, who’s strong.”  Tortilla chip fragments, soggy with spit, shower my tee.

I tear off a paper towel, dip the corner of it into my glass of water, and begin to clean my spattered bosom.

“Please don’t talk while you’re chewing; look what you did to me.”

Doug sees and a crooked smile fills his face.  He reaches over and pinches my erect nipple peeping through the damp shirt.  “Ah, good ol’ American freedom,” he says and trains his eyes back to the TV.

A flash of action darts across my field of vision.  “Life’s different now,” I say.  “We used to hear about things like this after they happened.  Now it’s broadcast live.  That’s not how it was when we were kids.  We crowded around the radio to get our news.”

“Hummmph!”  Doug soaks in the real life drama, unfolding before him.

I grab my knitting.  “I can’t watch this anymore,” I say.

“Well just shut up, then.  I let you know what happens.”

Visions of the two grandsons we’d raised loom before me.  Thank God they’re more like me than Doug, I think.  They’d never get involved in this.

“I wonder what the boys are up to now,” I say.

“What do you think they’re up to?”

“Studying, I guess. The new semester’s just begun.”

“I know for a fact that Ernie’s doing the exact same thing that we are,” Doug said.  “But I wouldn’t be surprised if Eddie’s watching golf.”

“So, why can’t we watch golf?” I ask.

Doug raises his index finger and leans forward, resting his head in the palms of his hand, elbows on his knees.

From the corner of my eye I glimpse another body splayed face down, unmoving.  The camera pans to a close-up of Condi Rice.  How can she let this happen?  She’s a woman, for God’s sake.

Our country’s flag waves in the right hand corner of the scene.  A buzzer sounds reminding me of the take-cover drills we had to do in grammar school.  There are no winners, I realize.

“Two minute warning,” the announcer calls.  “Stand by for Super Bowl XL’s half time show featuring the Rolling Stones.”


5 thoughts on “Monday Morning Writing Prompt–Superbowl or…?

  1. ladynimue says:

    what a well crafted tale of daily life and how its affected by actions beyond our control .. i loved reading this 🙂


  2. trisha says:

    very challenging topic. 🙂
    loved your post will have to see if i can capture this one 🙂


  3. Ditto, Amy. Well done, Victoria.


  4. souldipper says:

    Message received, Victoria. It impacts even though I’m a member of the choir. 😀


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