Snowbird’s Lament–a Haibun NaPoWriMo Day 6


Mal dia para el golf

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Snowbird Lament
a Haibun

Mockingbird failed me this morning—no song to rouse me from restless sleep. I drag my aching bones from bed and plod to the window, crack the blinds and greet a pewter sky. Heaviness, oppression.

Does all nature sense
the shifting winds and weather
April’s heaviness

Has the desert sun and palette of blue spoiled me for vagaries of spring? Will we be able to keep our nine-thirty tee time?

First tee—wind kicks up
my ball finds water
an excuse today

We go ahead and play eighteen. Gray skies tamp down the ball’s flight, slow down the putts it seems. Rain spits at us all morning.

Spring in Palm Desert
old people play rounds of golf
ignore aches and pains.

Written in response to Monday Morning Writing Prompt and for NaPoWriMo Day 6. The form is a haibun–a blend of prose and haiku.

https://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2011/04/04/monday-morning-writing-prompt  6/ 

http://www.napowrimo.net/

 

 

 

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19 thoughts on “Snowbird’s Lament–a Haibun NaPoWriMo Day 6

  1. […] I took Victoria up on her Monday Morning Writing Prompt of a Haibun.  See her page for definition.  I blended a Flash Fiction story of 100 words with a haiku.https://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2011/04/06/snowbirds-lament-a-haibun-napowrimo-day-6/ […]

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  2. Samanthamj says:

    loved this. it flowed very nicely… and came together beautifully.

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  3. […] Snowbird’s Lament – a Haibun NaPoWriMo Day 6 (liv2write2day.wordpress.com) […]

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  4. ladynimue says:

    This was a perfect haibun .. I did one long abck and it was sucha task .. Might try again soon .. thanks to you 🙂

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  5. Mike Patrick says:

    Beautifully done. I’ve never heard of a haibun before. Sounds like fun.

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  6. Mama Zen says:

    This is so clever!

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  7. dani says:

    wow! you always put so much into your writing. this is wonderful ~ prose and poetry.

    thank you for introducing me to haibun ~ i really enjoyed it and think it’s something i’ll be trying again. ♥

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  8. honeyhaiku says:

    Wow, beautiful haibun! I love way you woven together nature with the recreations of human is tandem with the seasons!

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  9. trisha says:

    this is beautifully crafted victoria. enjoyed it. hope the weather will get better soon.

    mine is here: http://mydomainpvt.wordpress.com/2011/04/04/free-soul-4-4-11/

    trisha

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  10. vivinfrance says:

    I’m so sorry you’re not having the beautiful near-heatwave April we have here! T’as mal ou? (for non French speakers that’s a universal greeting between us old fogeys: Where does it hurt>)

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    • Ah, but it’s been in the 80’s and 90’s (F) and today blue skies are back. And how to pinpoint the aching bones of us old fogeys??? But life is good and we play through the pain.

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  11. I could smell grass, wet leaves, and wet grass on bare feet venturing out after winds and weather. Beautiful imagery. Very nice.

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  12. Judy Roney says:

    I relate to this rising with the aches and pains. What a wonderful setting you are in though , Palm Desert..paradise. Loved “pewter sky” and laughed at “old people play rounds of golf”. Good for them! Stay active and turned on.

    http://judyidliketosay.blogspot.com/2011/04/dont-talk-think.html

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  13. Bodhirose says:

    Oh, that is sad. Sounds like it’s a chore even to go out and have some fun on the links. Well done–I could almost feel my aches and pains!

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  14. Lovely. I very much like the prose about the mockingbird. Their song in the morning I miss since I moved away from Florida. There are mockingbirds here, but I’ve only heard one singing in a year and a half.

    Thank you for sharing your Haibun with us. Blessings, Victoria…

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  15. Jamie Dedes says:

    These are perfectly beautiful. Soul soothing!

    Toward the end of this article there’s a short piece on free tanka – relative to your remark on my blog –
    http://www.tankaonline.com/About%20Tanka%20and%20Its%20History.htm

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  16. Ekphrastic poetry ..how do you feel.It’s like a lot of challenges ,is’nt it?I have done mine for day 6 too and its like running in a race 🙂
    The haibun poetry is a nice choice

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