Recall–NaPoWriMo Day 8

Dark Come Soon, Tegan and Sara

Image by Dia™ via Flickr


You just couldn’t let it alone, could you?
Always digging, digging, digging beneath
the surface, in the coffee-drinking lobe of
my Kiwi-mush brain. Unearthing the pungent
heat of memories better left buried jusqu’a le fin,
until the day you roll the dice and snake eyes
pierce the fabric of my fragmented soul. Miss May
told you I’d never amount to anything
and I didn’t disappoint, did I? Did I?

NaPoWriMo’s prompt for today suggested we incorporate seven disparate concepts into one poem. I have no idea where this one came from.

  • an example of synasthetic metaphor — one that describes one sensory perception using adjectives more naturally suited to a different sense
  • a fruit
  • the name (first or last) of someone you knew in school
  • a rhetorical question
  • a direct address to the poem’s audience
  • a word in a foreign language
  • a reference to a game of chance


12 thoughts on “Recall–NaPoWriMo Day 8

  1. Jamie Dedes says:

    Isn’t it interesting how poems just appear? Beautifully done and quite suggestive.


  2. I felt anger here! Made me angry on your behalf too …


  3. honeyhaiku says:

    This was a toughie, but you executed it flawlessly. I love it.


  4. You nailed ’em all! Fantastic, Victoria.


  5. trisha says:

    with that sincerity one can turn a garden of flower in desert. 😦

    one should never let such a person linger too close.


  6. ladynimue says:

    This was so strong !
    Hard words but i loved them ..


  7. dani says:

    you did an amazing job of incorporating the prompts! just as a poem ~ very strong emotions.


  8. Mike Patrick says:

    Ya nailed it. Anything with those prompts would be wonderful, but you tied it all together.


  9. Rallentanda says:

    Excellent response to a difficult prompt. The Miss Mays of this world don’t know anything. I’m still trying to work out what a Kiwi mush brain is:) A stupid New Zealander,perhaps?


  10. It’s fun to read. Tickles the imagination. Thank you for sharing.


  11. dswan2 says:

    Wow! that’s one tough assignment! Don’t know if I want to join that group or not! But you did it quite nicely!


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