The Call of Spring–An Octain

Photo: David Slotto April 2011

This poem is in response to One Stop Poetry’s invitation to write an Octain, a poetic form developed by fellow poet/blogger Luke Prater. Visit their site to learn about Octains, read other emerging and seasoned poets and, perhaps, write one of your own.

As I was pondering a subject for mine I glanced out the window of my treehouse/office and a hummingbird was hovering–I guess to thank me for putting out the feeder. He’s still here! I couldn’t resist using this photo of the Leucistic Hummingbird that frequented our feeder while we were in Palm Desert over the winter.

The Call of Spring
An Octain

Outside my window, should I look,
a hummingbird has taken wing
while nightingale begins to sing.

A quail emerges from her nook
for her dirt bath beside the path
that moseys down along the brook.

Attending to the call of spring
to go outside, I close my book.

28 thoughts on “The Call of Spring–An Octain

  1. Jamie Dedes says:

    Very dear and relatable poem. Well written. Thank you! Enjoyed much.


  2. Bodhirose says:

    I would have gladly put down my book to visit that scenery. I sure do love that sweet little white hummingbird!


  3. mairmusic says:

    A lovely spring poem, my friend! The form is a neat variation on a sonnet or decima.


  4. Luke Prater says:

    Very nice Victoria… as usual.. thanks for trying my Octain


  5. Love the message in this, since experience is often a far better way to live than through the filter of a book. Not knocking a good read, though. 😀


  6. Great take on the powerful pull of nature.


  7. Love the words of this octain 😀

    I believe it would be a sin to NOT go outdoors whilst nature calls in such a way…or at least appreciate it from our windows.

    Chloe xx


  8. claudia says:

    oh i wish we had hummingbirds where i live…a beautiful octain victoria…flows like the song of the bird. the only line which stops the flow a bit is: for her dirt bath beside the path because the stress is on “for” – maybe you could change it to “her DIRT bath X beSIDE the PATH – then it’s iambic – but can’t find a fitting word for X at the moment..


  9. jinksy says:

    I wonder why you chose not to repeat the first line at the end? I think it would have worked rather well…


  10. Mary says:

    Oh, very nice! Worth closing the book for :o)
    Thanks for visiting my blog as well.


  11. Tino says:

    Have no idea what an octain is, but going to find out for sure. I did try the sestain, very difficult, as its a style I know nothing of, but where theres a will theres a way.

    Sometimes, it just so right, to close the book/leave the dishes/stop watching tv and just go outside. Lovely piece with another mention of birds. I get the impression you love birds as much as I do.


  12. trisha says:

    this is beautiful. feels just like spring- thats for sure.


  13. dancingfreak says:

    lovely 🙂


  14. Alive aLwaYs says:

    Wow! Spring sure has come and is lovely.


  15. Pen says:

    Lovely, I love the twist to the first line/last line. Clever.


  16. Spring indeed has the most beautiful window’s view. Closing a book, to go outside and read the story of nature! Nice!


  17. moondustwriter says:

    Ah spring and you sing such a joyous song in this Octain


  18. souldipper says:

    Wonderful confirmation of well-ordered priorities!


  19. danroberson says:

    Beautiful view from your window. Loved your octain.


  20. Helena White says:

    Sweet and lovely ~.^ smiling!


  21. leah says:

    Love this , it was so sweet.


  22. What a stunning hummingbird! And a lovely verse to go along with it. Thank you for sharing! Blessings to you, Victoria…


  23. knightsheart says:

    I enjoyed this poem very much Victoria. the words woke me like a hummingbird and made me happy is was Spring.
    loved the “to go outside, I close my book.”


  24. Very pretty. Would love to be looking outside your window!


  25. ladynimue says:

    Sweet and fresh !! you inspired me again I must admit ..


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