a taste of earth–dVerse Open Link Night


River Bokeh

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a taste of earth

before time
in the realm of golden crow
and swan
sun and pearl moon conjoined
begetting earth.

from distant mountain heights
a goddess and her sisters watched
and saw that it was very, very good.

thus to the land they leapt
drawn by sweet smell of soil
drawn into earth’s desire

within her hands Au Co,
the youngest of the brood,
cradled damp pungent clay
held it against her cheek
then tasted.

and so weighed down
by sand (or guilt)
no longer fit for flight
she wept upon the loam
held back now from her home
heaven of pure form

she cried her tears of loss
earth-bound goddess now

those tears became the rivers
flowing to the seas
spreading floral beauty to the shores
gracing oceans deep with her sweet water.

then from the depths emerged
a dragon prince who sought
this source of pure abundance
and thus it is that we are born
part dragon of the shadowy deep
part goddess of the mountain peak.

Based on the Vietnamese myth of the goddess Au Co.

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44 thoughts on “a taste of earth–dVerse Open Link Night

  1. Mohana says:

    Wonderful write!

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  2. Jamie Dedes says:

    Lovely story. Beautifully written poem. I like the idea of being “part shadowy deep” and “part mountain peak.” Balance.

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  3. mairmusic says:

    Love the mythology, and your words flow like the rivers.

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  4. your words make us think,

    well done.

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  5. ladynyo says:

    What a beautiful lyrical poem!

    Wasn’t familiar with the mythology, but how beautiful.

    Thank you, for bringing this to us.

    Lady Nyo

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  6. Oops– I meant to say “in” these words… 🙂

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  7. I was drawn in by this story…and before I knew it was a myth, I wondered… beautiful piece, I could spend a lot of time of these words.

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  8. Bodhirose says:

    I hadn’t heard of this myth either–there’s so many, from so many cultures–but your poem on it is just beautiful, Victoria. And a happy ending too.

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  9. leah says:

    spreading floral beauty to the shores , like this line. this was a lovely poem and the pictures spoke your words perfectly.

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  10. tinkwelborn says:

    Nice Myth!! I enjoyed this! thank you.
    the visuals given me (the reader) are virginal and mellifluous – pure & lyrical.
    I like especially the metaphor of tasting the clay & hence becoming mortal.
    nice, very nice piece. thanks for posting for reading.

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  11. Shadiatique says:

    First of all I did not know anything about Au Co so thanks for teaching me about the myth. It was interesting to read about it.

    Powerful words explaining the tail of how tears become rivers. Lovely poem, very enjoyable.

    Thanks for sharing 😉

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  12. vivinfrance says:

    I so much admire the way you have woven this myth into a wonderful story poem – totally beyond me! Your poem should definitely win a competition or otherwise be published, so that more people can read it.

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  13. claudia says:

    so mystical and beautifully woven…need to check out the link…didn’t know the story but love your poem victoria

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  14. Ruth says:

    Ah, a new creation myth – new to me anyway, and written artfully, in a new way. I like the idea of being part dragon, part goddess, and (in time, hopefully) equally proud of both heritages…

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  15. libithina says:

    loved this Victoria ~ what a lovely myth of au co enjoyed reading that too not heard before .. faery I love 🙂 and the dragon ~ like minds
    ‘and thus it is that we are born
    part dragon of the shadowy deep
    part goddess of the mountain peak’.
    you know I thought so too ~ 🙂
    so lovely ~
    ty Victoria for visiting and lovely comment
    and also for sharing your lovely piece and legend
    so enjoyed
    Lib x

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  16. thus to the land they leapt
    drawn by sweet smell of soil
    drawn into earth’s desire

    and that last verse is marvelous, such a rich feast. I am looking forward to the Wednesday prompt. I like what Steven said about the ritual, it feels steeped in your beautiful language but it’s almost an incantation, wonderful!

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  17. David King says:

    Love the unexpectedness of the final twist.

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  18. such a wonderful poem and I love other cultures so much. My Grandfather was Indian, I love the Tahitian culture and it is such a joy to read of different cultures and such a pleasure to read this
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/18/farewell-my-three-legged-friend/

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  19. fiveloaf says:

    very versatile with great choice of words- great style of your own liv.. tq for coming by..

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  20. Lovely poem and a true treat to learn of other cultures…….

    If I should be part dragon, though,
    my heart would not avail.
    Lo on these wings of glory rise
    the depths of my own hell……

    For on that mountain top I’d perch
    and wait for my lady fair.
    But it’s sure that my fiery breath
    would only singe her lovely hair.

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  21. zongrik says:

    I liked it, and then you said it was based on a myth, and I was disappointed, because I was hoping that the story was yours. 😦

    Maybe you can come up with your own myth and write a poem, or maybe….maybe….there can be a monday myth-day or mythday monday?? 🙂

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  22. This is wonderful story-telling. Especially loved that last stanza 🙂

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  23. Jeff says:

    From sadness, abundance.

    Whimsical and heartwarming, nicely told in verse.

    Cheers!

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  24. brian miller says:

    wow victoria…this is a beautiful rendering of that tale…i was vaguely familiar with it before but you bring it to vivid life in your verse….

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  25. Chris G. says:

    Interesting…based on a Vietnamese myth you say? I’m not familiar, but certainly intrigued. Dare I say it? Wikipedia, here I come!

    As for the work itself: a beautiful tale, both warm and natural. Always fascinated by myths as such…

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    • The Wikipedia version is a bit different from the one I used, which I learned in a course presented on CD by The Teaching Company–they have wonderful offerings in all subjects. I like to listen to them when I exercise…it eases the misery. :0)

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  26. I love hearing this. So beautiful, creative, one almost sees it figuratively embroidered on a silk screen,going down into depths of dimensions as old as any stories told by firelight. Excellent.

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  27. Adura Ojo says:

    Deep and earthy. Something sublime to warm up an autumn night.

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  28. Adura Ojo says:

    Deep and earthy. Something sublime to warm up an autumn night:)

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  29. Pat Hatt says:

    Lvoe the mythic nature woven in and such a storied tale you weave, enjoyed the read here at your feed.

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  30. Lovely, lovely write. Wonderful how you weaved myth into being so well. Enjoyed it very much!

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  31. I love those final lines ~ ‘and thus it is that we are born
    part dragon of the shadowy deep
    part goddess of the mountain peak.’ ~ lovely, mythical piece.

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  32. tashtoo says:

    I am an earth bound goddess, so I can relate 😉 Wonderful word weaving! Love the myth, the imagery, bravo!

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  33. hobgoblin2011 says:

    Very nicely told. I love myth and eventually I would like to make my way to the Asian folklore. Have a ways to go yet but one day. Your piece though certainly makes me want to perhaps skip the next book in my to-do list, which is the folklore of Italy. Great job, I really enjoyed the read. Thanks

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  34. Steve King says:

    What quiet and powerful verse. It reads like ritual.

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  35. jenneandrews says:

    A lovely interpretation of this story– mythic and eloquent! xxxxj http://parolavivace.blogspot.com .

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  36. ayala says:

    Lovely piece!

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  37. Morning says:

    a deep and creative piece.

    very enjoyable read.

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