Mourning


Mourning Dove

Mourning Dove (Photo credit: mizmak)

Photo: David Slotto, all rights reserved.

Mourning

Alone beneath a velvet sky
silver sparks dance with sparrows,
crystal moons splinter.

Clay turtles melt
on an empty canvas
leaving tawny shadows
beside the hibiscus
that blooms
in velvet wonder.

A hummingbird descends,
drinks
perfumed blood and honey.
Blankets of feathers
stagger across its
silken breast.

Mourning doves
covet joy.

Ladles of honey
slip down
throats,
mask pain,
balance
the loss of
life’s rhythm.

Submitted to dVerse Poets’ Open Link Night and Write2Day.

Copyright 2012, Victoria C. Slotto, all rights reserved.

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15 thoughts on “Mourning

  1. Yousei Hime says:

    My mother loves her hummingbirds. I wonder if she’s ever had an albino one at one of her feeders. She said she had a crazy number there last summer, with as many as five feeders going at once, refilling those twice a day. Enjoyed this poem and the pictures.

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  2. Sadness and yet, still seeing beauty in so much of nature. Deeply moving and beautiful pics too. Humming birds are such delicate little birds, so colourful (the males) so busy and also pretty trusting too if they are fed regularly by the same hands. We have a kitchen clock which sounds a different birds song every hour on the hour, 7am is the Mourning dove, it always makes me feel sad, such a sad sounding call.
    Lovely prose.

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  3. dragonkatet says:

    There are some good images in this, and there isa balance in this piece, but it seemed to be of two very different things: joy and sadness. That the sadness of loss gets masked by the joy of living. I found your use of the birds interesting, too…the mourning dove such a quiet, peaceful and shy seeming bird with such a sad call, and the hummingbird (especially that white one, God how beautiful he is!) who is always energy, moving, the very epitome of life! The only thing I paused on in this was the double use of the word “velvet” so closely together. Other than that, you really reached deep with this one. 🙂

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  4. ManicDdaily says:

    Lovely poem–the juxtaposition of mourning doves, humming birds, honey. K.

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  5. An emotional powerhouse in gentle words.

    Are they mourning doves? I always thought they were morning doves?

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  6. souldipper says:

    Ah, Victoria. I’m so sorry…

    With love.

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  7. Chazzy Chazz says:

    You capture so much of nature’s grace. I wonder, then, where the sense of loss comes from at the end.

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  8. brian miller says:

    love all the natural elements before you turn so personal in that last line…grieving is such a hard journey….likes rhythm seems so hard to get back to in the midst of it…but it can be found again…nice evocative piece victoria.

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  9. christi moon says:

    very emotionally wrought piece Victoria. beautiful depiction of deep sadness and loss. very touching and this line is simply gorgeous–

    crystal moons splinter. <– wow wish I had written that.

    wonderful poetry.

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  10. Beth Winter says:

    Beautiful. I believe that Claudia said everything I could have offered. I felt serene as I read.

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  11. ayala says:

    Beautiful , Victoria !

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  12. hobgoblin2011 says:

    Really like the way you painted this piece. Each character here, mainly the animals of nature, are all symbolic, love how the turtle stands out as the non-bird- really like that. And the adjectives and description choices in each stanza come out very strong. Thanks

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  13. Bodhirose says:

    You take me into nature so well with your perfectly chosen words, Victoria. I always love seeing that spectacular photo of the white hummingbird too.

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  14. zongrik says:

    I like the blood and honey being so fragrant to the bird, it’s the bird’s point of view.

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  15. claudia says:

    masking pain and balance the loss of life’s rhythm…there’s a sense of loneliness and strong desire for the real, for freedom, for life in this…love the images you create here…somehow resonates with the strange mood i’m in at the moment..smiles..glad you joined us victoria and can’t wait to see what you’re coming up with for tomorrow’s meeting the bar..

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