Drizzle


Desert Rain

Desert Rain (Photo credit: tinyfroglet)

As the day evolves
from overcast
to sun to rain again,

the Artisan steps in
and brushes clouds
across blue skies—

wet-on-wet—
then takes a rag
and smears,

sprinkling sadness
into an otherwise
perfect moment.

I’ll be waiting for you at dVerse Poets Pub where a bunch of us gather to share friendship and poetry. Hope you’ll come join us. Claudia’s hosting and I hear she mixes a mean martini… then, there’s the German beer!

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17 thoughts on “Drizzle

  1. dragonkatet says:

    I think only one who has painted wet-on-wet would think of this technique to use as a metaphor in a poem. 🙂 well-said, well-word-painted! Of course the grey is what makes the colors ‘pop’, right?

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  2. claudia says:

    see..now i came for your sun stripe poem…and…smiles.. thanks for your well wishes victoria

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  3. Eve Redwater says:

    “Artisan steps in
    and brushes clouds
    across blue skies—

    wet-on-wet—
    then takes a rag
    and smears,” – This is so evocative, I love the mental image your words gave me here!

    As I write this, the rain is still pouring here, non-stop for two days now. I love the sound and smell of it though. 🙂

    Beautiful poem, thank you for sharing it with us!

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  4. We had rain here yesterday and it was a perfect reflection of your poem here. At some point I wasn’t sure who was chasing who? The dark clouds chasing the sun or the other way round, but it was pretty how they moved across the sky.

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  5. Becky says:

    I love love love “sprinkles sadness into an otherwise perfect moment”
    That is brilliant!

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  6. dfb says:

    This is really beautiful Victoria! Not sure I’d mix grain and grape though! 🙂 German beer is excellent.

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  7. claudia says:

    this reads like a painting…like a watercolor painting in fact..love it victoria…and heck yes..and cheers on the german beer..smiles

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  9. vivinfrance says:

    Victoria, this is a delicate triumph of a watercolour poem. Envious applause for you!

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  10. Other Mary says:

    Your final stanza really sets the tone. We all make our landscapes as we choose, don’t we? This is artfully done (dumb put, but it’s also true).

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  11. whimsygizmo says:

    Ooooooh. So gorgeously sad. Especially this last stanza:
    sprinkling sadness
    into an otherwise
    perfect moment.

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  12. lolamouse says:

    I love how you use painting to describe the weather and the mood of the day. It’s almost like an ekphrastic poem.

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  13. Dare I say – perfection is boring, and if a gray drizzle is sad, it’s a pleasant kind of melancholy. Love your watercolor descriptions.

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  14. Ravenblack says:

    I think you captured the moment and emotion when rain starts to lightly fall, and a day that is sunny dims a bit as the cloud pass over the sky. 🙂 Enjoyed this.

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  15. Ruth says:

    this is altogether gorgeous, Victoria – every word of it… although some would argue it’s not sadness that’s sprinkled… hmm, or maybe that sadness also fits into a perfect world? 😀 – but regardless, I love the poem exactly as it stands

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  16. Oh yes, I know that painterly sky…beautifully said.

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