Silence–Flash Fiction

death bed

death bed (Photo credit: Damian Bere)

Today, while working my poetry comments I happened upon a site that offers Five Sentence Flash Fiction Prompts using a one-word prompt. As I’ve been so consumed in the world of poetry and the business side of publishing my novels, my fiction writing has taken a back seat to poetry. And so, I thought I’d hop on in and take a few moments to participate in this challenge. This week’s word prompt offered by hostess, Lilie McFerrin, is Silence. Here’s mine:


For weeks after she died, oppressive silence filled her room, creeping like fog into every aspect of my life. I didn’t miss the curses or abuse she handed out, day-after-day, year-after-year. Nor did I mind the aloneness of it all. Even the hospice nurse, when she visited to reclaim left-over supplies and medications, said nothing when she saw the empty morphine bottle. But in my mind, silence screams its verdict: “Guilty; guilty as charged.”

I’d like to invite you to check out my blog and website for information on my Novel, Winter is Past, published by Lucky Bat Books and available in print form on and, as well as in most e-book formats.

If you’re here to visit my poem for dVerse Poetics, it’s the previous post.


14 thoughts on “Silence–Flash Fiction

  1. Jamie Dedes says:

    Thanks for the tip, Victoria.

    The story draws us right in and waiting for more. Well done.


  2. It’s always fascinating how each of us can see a single word through a different angle. I’d personally describe silence with the time at night just before a storm, but your take is much more unique and creative!


  3. Great job of condensing a lifetime into a moment.


  4. dragonkatet says:

    Wow! This was dynamite, Victoria. I love your poetry, for sure, but I think your calling is definitely in fiction…to be able to say so much in so few lines takes talent! Interesting picture, too…the yellow walls reminded me of that story “The yellow wallpaper”. Anyway, even though this is “flash fiction” I like how there are still layers to be discovered in this piece. Well done!


  5. ManicDdaily says:

    Like the flash fiction. The book stuff just so hard. k.


  6. Mama Zen says:

    Excellent, Victoria!


  7. Sandra says:

    Pleased you’ve joined. This was an excellent piece; it said so much in a few short words.


  8. A great piece, very damning, but perfectly written!


  9. Louise says:

    Gosh, so powerful, Victoria…..& so much packed into 5 sentences… (I think I’m going to become addicted to this)…..great writing!


  10. vivinfrance says:

    The discipline of flash fiction produced a nice tight dramatic story. Bravo.


  11. Phil Hall says:

    I like it! 🙂


  12. I hope you’ll participate again in 5 sentence fiction, Victoria. I always enjoy the challenge of concentrating a story into such a few words. You’ve certainly done it successfully here! I like how the character’s guilt, though unknown to others, is causing a fog in her own mind. Great take on the inspiration word!


  13. Excellent, I love it! Well done 🙂


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