The Second Week

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In the almost-beginning, that is,
the second week of creation,
God created some letters.
He tossed them up, shuffled them,
and, voilà, they formed words.
God was delighted.
This is a great idea, God said.
Verbs and nouns work well.
He found that it was very, very good.

The second day
of the second week of creation
God decided he wanted to describe the beauty
that he had set in motion the previous week.
God came up with adjectives, adverbs,
metaphors, and all sorts of tropes.
He set about naming colors and shapes,
tones, scents, textures and everything
else that human senses could take in.
He got so excited that before he knew it
the third and fourth day had passed
and God hadn’t even had a nap.

Early on the morning of the fifth day,
God played with rhyme and meter.
The sounds of words flowed
throughout His Universe.
Once again, God was thrilled.
This verse is something truly enchanting, God said.
I wish I’d thought of it before.

That evening he thought he’d better check
in on the Garden.
There he found Adam and Eve,
curled up beneath the Tree of Life.
They had their hands cupped over their ears.
On their faces, knitted brows and pursed lips
spoke of their confusion.
God hadn’t planned on allowing suffering.
He realized the poor creatures couldn’t grasp the sounds,
so he told them, Relax, I’ll be back tomorrow.

True to his Word, the next morning,
just as the sun was peeking over the horizon
and the songbirds were tuning up for morning praise
God dropped in on the couple.
Holding his hand, was a young child
with silky black curls and a peaceful demeanor.
She wore a gauzy white robe
and carried a sheaf of papyrus.
Her aura was quite visible to Adam and Eve,
showcasing, one after another,
the colors of the rainbow.
Look here, God said. Look who I have for you.
And so it was that on the sixth day
of the second week of creation God created a Poet.
She’s here to help you make sense of it all, God said.

On the second Sabbath, that is,
the seventh day of the second week of creation,
God felt exhausted and Adam and Eve could hardly keep their eyes open.
So it happened that the three of them—
God, Adam and Eve, all rested together against the trunk of the Tree
while the Child-Poet-Muse read aloud.

I’m linking this whimsical story-poem, first draft, to dVerse Poets’ Pub Open Link Night. I have no intention of trivializing Sacred Scripture, but rather wish to elevate words, poetry and poets as a gift of the Creator.

You are all invited and encouraged to participate in this wonderful poetry community. Stop by and enjoy reading, and add a poem of your own! The link will be open Tuesday 3 PM EST.


33 thoughts on “The Second Week

  1. dragonkatet says:

    This was awesome, Victoria! Excellent story! 😀 I always wondered where that Child-Poet-Muse came from…


  2. Jamie Dedes says:

    Smiling. Clapping hands. Pure fun and most original. Congratulations.


  3. I just love this delightful story/poem! It feels true! 🙂


  4. kolembo says:

    enjoyed, enjoyed, easy words but lilting into my ears like birds cooing and funny and full, and satisfying.

    Very nice reading!


  5. hobgoblin2011 says:

    Very fun read. I love the fun air here and the way you told the tale with the perfectly used narrative tone. Really nice twist on the traditional story, and in so doing, creating a mythological origin story for the poet. Fantastically creative Victoria. Thanks


  6. dani says:

    delightful, Victoria! and so original! i wonder what God did the next week? create painters?


  7. Chazinator says:

    Ah, lovely, indeed. This is a tale to recall when I get into the doldrums and question where goeth the verses. I especially enjoyed the humor with which you tell the story, and think it adds a wonderful way to deflect knee-jerk skepticism regarding the Eden story.


  8. leahJlynn says:

    Oh, what a beautiful and delightful story, I image the child’s name was Grace.I could not get enough of reading it.


  9. This is so creative – a fun read. I think the best part is them leaning on the trunk of the tree at the end!


  10. souldipper says:

    And didn’t you have a ball with this one! It brings a great big grin that is still hanging all over my face! Fun, unique and enjoyable to read! Thanks , Victoria.


  11. joanbarrettroberts says:

    Oh I loved loved your poem! Original fresh
    & a great read! Loved the poet as the child~
    God’s gift to all of us! Superbly crafted!


  12. Everyone has said everything. I like what Barbara said most but they are all in accord. This is a phantasmagorica of delight claiming this writing of poetry that we attempt a true gift from God.


  13. I love it, Victoria. A wonderful story!


  14. ayala says:

    A delight to read, Victoria 🙂 Creative and wonderful!


  15. hedgewitch says:

    Completely charming, Victoria. I enjoyed it very much–the world needs a child muse to make sense of a lot of things!


  16. shanyns says:

    This I am totally and utterly in love with. I’m going to be reading it over and over again!


  17. Laurie Kolp says:

    Oh, I love it, Victoria… so clever!!


  18. Oh, I love this! It’s only through either words, or, pictures we really know anything of history and, in ancient times most history was handed down by non other than poets. This really is a wonderful read! 🙂


  19. tashtoo says:

    Victoria! This needs to be printed, shared, distributed, and shared some more! You call it first draft…well…to be honest, and I certainly mean to offend no one, this is MY kind of scripture…New favorite! New favorite!


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  22. bkmackenzie says:

    of course this baby muse holds the key to life…and lives in us all…let us all listen to our inner child..thank you God…bkm


  23. ManicDdaily says:

    Would it were so! (Maybe was.) Love the idea of everyone being read aloud too. And then there was light. K.


  24. Louise says:

    Lovely verse….it does feel such a gift to have the power of words to describe the world….wonderful writing 🙂


  25. Ravenblack says:

    This is brilliant, Victoria. 🙂 Wonderfully told!


  26. brian miller says:

    haha this is awesome victoria….smiles….god created poets on the second week…and words….boy am i glad, something to play with and entertain…and in the end it made for great therapy…i dont know if i saw god create form though, i think the serpent brought that in…smiles….fun


  27. tigerbrite says:

    For God said that it is only as little children we shall find the kingdom of heaven.
    Well done Victoria, this is so good.


  28. Susan says:

    Re-mythifying poetry! Fun. I love that you see God entranced with language! And I love that poetry is a child who will begin by teaching but will have to be nourished to grow.


  29. vivinfrance says:

    Inspired and inspiring. It is intriguing that the Poet is portrayed as a child – the viewpoint of a child is the truest, and we should emulate that innocence and honesty in our poetry.


  30. Your imagination here is impeccable, sparkling! Good, very good Victoria! What would we do without poets?


  31. Claudia says:

    ah you should see me smile…loved it victoria…and yep…those adverbs and adjectives and metaphors are surely a gift from god and stringing them together helps us to make sense of it all…love also that god got so excited in playing with rhyme and meter and everything that he forgot time…just like it is..right…smiles


  32. jmgoyder says:

    This is so wonderful and different!


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