Fall-ing–dVerse Meeting the Bar


Tonight, I will be busy tending the bar at dVerse Poets’ Pub where I’ve mixed things up a bit with prompts dealing with STEAMPUNK and ENJAMBMENT. You are invited to join us, write to either or both of the elements, and sit back to sip poetry and comment on your fellow pub-crawlers. This poem features enjambment. Have fun, every one!

Photo: D. Slotto

Fall-
ing

Tonight—
sluggish cricket songs
falter,
wail a mournful tune,
announce
the demise of summer.

Tomorrow—
season’s final farmers’ market,
offerings
scant, I fear,
squash
green, yellow, orange.

Yesterday—
summer ecstasy
shouting
“taste my intensity,”
flaunting
colors of an artist’s palette.

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37 thoughts on “Fall-ing–dVerse Meeting the Bar

  1. […] Fall-ing – dVerse Meeting the Bar (liv2write2day.wordpress.com) […]

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  2. Jamie Dedes says:

    Vivid and vital. Captures the season well.

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  3. dani says:

    beautiful, Victoria! such vivid imagery and i love, love, love the first stanza!

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  4. Rallentanda says:

    We are all basically primitive. We come alive in Spring and die a little in fall.

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  5. kaykuala says:

    Yesterday—summer ecstasy
    shouting “taste my intensity,”
    flaunting colors of an artist’s palette.

    Seems we’re in a hurry to take whatever is left of wonderful summer. The frenzy is equated to the artist’s reaction on his palette. Great imagery Victoria!

    Hank

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  6. janehewey says:

    i love your colors, their sleek imagery, and your timing is stout. completely engaging!

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  7. gardenlilie says:

    Thank you Victoria….clean crisp words just like Autumn. The picture has all the results from your poem. Nice and I enjoyed this prompt tremendously.

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  8. Simple. Lovely. Simply lovely! Even the title is artful “Fall-ing”!

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  9. Nice combination of imagery and line break to convey autumn. I went with your other prompt although it was very difficult to find any details of the nuts and bolts of the form.

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  10. Mama Zen says:

    Gorgeous line breaks and pacing!

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  11. festivalking says:

    Thanks for the lesson Victoria! 🙂 … Was fun wading through this one.

    Lovely piece 🙂

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  12. David King says:

    Lovely AND fun – good trick, that!

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  13. sreeja says:

    so lovely……like an artist paints all the seasonal changes………beautiful!

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  14. ‘flaunting’ ~ one of my fave words ~ great poem ~ great prompt ~ thanks Victoria 😀

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  15. Sabio Lantz says:

    A nice tribute to a beautiful summer. thanx

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  16. kkkkaty says:

    like your great use of past, present and future ….thank you for the interesting prompt..

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  17. “scant, I fear” … For some reason, this line makes me think you yourself (the speaker, that is) feel “scant” or small or somehow not enough … compared to other seasons in which you felt this:

    “summer ecstasy
    shouting
    ‘taste my intensity’”

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  18. Gary says:

    This was a great prompt, and naturally enough, a great example of a response. 🙂

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  19. ManicDdaily says:

    LOvely – the enjambment works so nicely – especially with the cricket – and the colors – gone from artist’s pallet to a few squash – ah. k .

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  20. tasting the intensity of a season…this is really cool…and each season tastes so different… we have farmer’s markets all year round…even in winter when it’s really cold…really cool prompt victoria…

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  21. Thank you, both for the inspiring prompt and this lovely poem/picture combination. Autumn is my favorite time of year!

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  22. leahJlynn says:

    The last line left me with a positive image of this lovely fall poem. Also , thank you for tend such a fun prompt.

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  23. Jessica says:

    Beautiful picture. Beautiful emotion. You’ve really captured the richness of the season.

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  24. How lovely the scene you paint. The breaks come at just the right times to emphasize the feeling of the scene.

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  25. tigerbrite says:

    We shall eventually see this but unfortunately summer still goes on here. Until a little while ago at midnight we were sitting outside on the terrace with a glass of wine and the thermometre said 23C

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  26. Lovely and colourful. I do enjoy all the changes at this time of year.

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  27. jmgoyder says:

    Wish I could come along – fantastic poem!

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  28. Mary says:

    Victoria, first of all, thank you for your article. Secondly, your poem here uses enjambment to the fullest. So sad when one realizes it is the final farm market for the season. This may be true of ours too on Saturday. I hear that mournful time and feel the demise of summer.

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  29. Ahhh… that’s how this feels just beautiful and delicate. Very nice.

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  30. nico says:

    All of the senses are engaged here, beautiful work.

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  31. Thank you for the prompt…It screamed at me through my fingers and walked all around my screen!

    your last stanza is so in line with what I wrote

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  32. Teresa says:

    This is such a perfect description of fall fading. Love how you make enjambment seem so easy.

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  33. brian miller says:

    smiles…great job on your line breaks victoria…i love going to the farmers market and seeing what all the farmers have brought in…and in certain seasons the colors are pretty amazing….as well as the tastes…

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  34. Mohana says:

    taste my intensity…wow!! gorgeous poem 🙂

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  35. Taste my intensity… delicious imagery 🙂 Sad for the crickets wail.
    Love autumn for its colours, hate the snow, ice and cold that follows all too soon behind.
    Great poem.

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  36. Susan says:

    I love this poem, especially tomorrow with its flaunting of taste and color!

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  37. Laurie Kolp says:

    Oh, so beautiful… and perfect line breaks. I can’t wait to read your article at dVerse!

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