Sentinel–a Sijo


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A Sijo

Two mockingbirds keep watch atop the tree outside our door.
One faces North, the other South. Are we protected?
Who knows? Though comfort comes in songs of cautious wonder.

Stop by dVerse and learn about this (new to many of us) Korean poetry form! This is a rough draft. I focused on syllable count rather than the wonderful nuances the form calls for. Thanks to Sam Peralta for the prompt.

 

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25 thoughts on “Sentinel–a Sijo

  1. janehewey says:

    the mockingbird sits well in this question. beautiful sijo, Victoria.

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  3. Sabio Lantz says:

    I loved this. I looked for a political analogy but I don’t think it is there. Instead, I view it as an actual happening, begging our minds for their metaphor powers — and yet, we must rest in the song. Very nice.

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  4. Rallentanda says:

    Nicer than guard dogs:)

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  5. ayala says:

    I love it 🙂

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  6. Suzy says:

    symbolism and reality nicely blended. Nice Sijo.

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  7. kaykuala says:

    Wonderful sijo, Victoria! Comfort comes in songs certainly!

    Hank

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  8. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) says:

    So visual and philosophical, both. The last line is lovely in sound and sense.

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  9. I love first drafts – and I love yours – because they are still pregnant with possibility. The hand can move over them, and weave a powerful incantation from the words that have been said, and from those that have yet to be said.

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  10. Mama Zen says:

    This is really lovely!

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  11. Beautiful, and what a question. Are we?

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  12. Truedessa says:

    are we protected? That is a big question but, mockingbirds are a symbol of protection so I would take comfort in that and their songs. Nice poetry.

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  13. Lila says:

    I get the sense you’re talking about “false security.”
    This is a thoughtful Sijo, Victoria.

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  14. Bodhirose says:

    I might have wondered a similar thing, Victoria, if I had seen two Mockingbirds facing north and south. We have some around our house that just sing and sing…sounds like pure joy…I love them.

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  15. Rowan Taw says:

    Oh wow, I’d love to see these birds, and I’m sure I’d forget all concerns whilst admiring them.

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  16. Rhonda says:

    Fascinating. I read the dVerse piece and was going to try, but instead I’m going to just read some more and get a better feel for this form.
    This was lovely

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  17. How do we feel protected .. indeed a profound question.. but if the singing mockingbirds does it .. feel safe 🙂

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  18. ManicDdaily says:

    This brought a real smile. Thanks, Victoria. k.

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  19. Mary says:

    I think if one feels protected one probably is. That is the way I would look at it. I wonder if they were male and female. There is something about watching birds……

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  20. brian miller says:

    it is interesting the split between comfort and security in this…there is a big difference, you know…cool visual as well with the birds victoria…

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  21. Tony Maude says:

    comfort comes in songs of cautious wonder – like Claudia, I love this line.

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  22. viv blake says:

    I love this – and would really like to see (and hear) a mocking bird.

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  23. claudia says:

    comfort comes in songs of cautious wonder….love this victoria…and who knows indeed, but we def. enjoy their songs..

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