After the Rain


Photo Credit: J. Korbetis

Photo Credit: J. Korbetis

Diamonds settle on mounds
of Dianthus while
sparrows splash with joy
in sparkling puddles.

Fresh scents suffuse morning
light: lemon
honeysuckle, spice.
Verbena and persimmon.

Today, I touch the moment,
but think of yesterdays
when once we walked
in rain and sand beneath

a canopy of stars
we tried in vain to count.
The promises you made
did not endure forever.

And now, alone, I ponder
life transformed by dew,
taste the sweetness of
tomorrow and a memory.

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26 thoughts on “After the Rain

  1. Jamie Dedes says:

    Evocative of the sense of rain and the sense of time passing. The last stanza is a beauty. Memorable.

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  2. Julie Laing says:

    This is beautiful, Victoria. The scents and tastes that you pull into it… I like how you give sweetness to the future and the past–or maybe that’s just my read of it? Thanks so much for sharing.

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  3. I loved the cohesiveness of elements and remembering is definitely the sweetest definition of oneness –to me.

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  4. Evocative, a deep breath through the slings and arrows of life. You invoke awe so well.

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  5. Pamela says:

    A poignant write that could apply to many a person’s life. Beautiful imagery throughout, Victoria. Thanks for commenting on my Sunday whirl poem, it was very nice to see you at my blog. Did you write to the whirl? Because I couldn’t find anything by you over there.

    Pamela

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  6. tigerbrite says:

    Beautiful piece. Your acceptance of the broken promise, it packed away, your memory of before and the moving on in confidence to the future. So well told.

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  7. Today, I touch the moment,
    but think of yesterdays
    when once we walked
    in rain and sand beneath

    This is so good! My favorite stanza is above but the assault of scents drew me in and the end, perfect, transformed by dew. Bravo!

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  8. Myrna says:

    What a lovely poem. It gives a sense of a little sorrow for yesterday’s promises, but still staying in the moment with nature’s scents. Love the idea of dew transforming life. Great thoughts here.

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  9. Truedessa says:

    Today, I touch the moment, but think of yesterdays. This is such a soulful statement. I really enjoyed the beauty of this poem.

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  10. ayala says:

    I am sorry about your sister. My thoughts are with you. Hugs.

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  11. Bittersweet words. Beautifully composed, my friend!

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  12. kaykuala says:

    Wonderful thoughts of yesteryears and what tomorrow might bring! It’s healthy to reflect to find a good path as a guide to the future. Great take Victoria!

    Hank

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  13. LaTonya says:

    I read acceptance. The peace you find later, when you’ve had time to mature. To know peace is had not in the absence of loss or pain but in acceptance of what is.

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  14. Love the images here.

    And that first verse is something special.

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  15. beckykilsby says:

    A hard-won calm and hope I sense here Victoria. Life’s joys are real, despite loss, and the specific details make that point beautifully.

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  16. ayala says:

    Love the ending..And now, alone, I ponder
    life transformed by dew,
    taste the sweetness of
    tomorrow and a memory….I love the scents and the feel in this poem.

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  17. annotating60 says:

    It seems we were on the same train of thought. Yours was very well done. The images clear and bright like the light after the rain has stopped.>KB

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  18. exquisite Victoria! You can email me laura@shinethedivine.com for more info re: Jewish Mindfulness Meditation:-)

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  19. wolfsrosebud says:

    loved the freshness of this… and the reflection

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  20. Marya says:

    “sparrow splash with joy” — yes, I have noticed that too. And the alliteration s quite nice too. Great images, Victoria.

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  21. That description of the smell is so befitting fot the time we have now.. and it means we can stay and live in the moment… but still reflect of the past and future … loved it.

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  22. Martin Shone says:

    Very nice and that last stanza!

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  23. Mary says:

    This is lovely, Victoria. I like the idea of touching the moment but remembering yesterdays, which means to me staying in the present but having memories to look back on. There is a sadness in “The promises you made did not endure forever.” I assume this refers to the end of a relationship or a death…..or just the circumstances of life somehow changing…as they sometimes do!

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  24. claudia says:

    tasting the sweetness of tomorrow and in peace with the memory it sounds…lemon
    honeysuckle, spice.
    Verbena and persimmon…..love that you give the poem a scent with these victoria

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  25. Such a beautiful write Victoria–poignant and sweet

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  26. brian miller says:

    it is good, on the backside, even after broken promises to still be able to see the beauty in the world…love the scents you stir up after the rain victoria…

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