Freedom–dVerse Form for All


Brian has us writing a story of 55 words, no more, no less. I did a severe edit to get this exact.

Freedom

Photo: YAbeyond.com

Photo: YAbeyond.com

Such a brilliant sunrise—an odd day for them to find his parents’ brains spattered on the wall.

He stuffed clothes in a bag, clenched the address Grandma sent him when he was five, slipped it into the pocket of his flannel shirt.

No one could suspect him. Shit, they didn’t even know he existed.

News Flash!!!

I’m excited to announce the release on Kindle of my first collection of poetry: Jacaranda Rain, Collected Poems, 2012, today, Thursday, August 22nd. You will find it for purchase on Amazon (Free for Kindle Prime members). Reviews on Amazon or Goodreads would be most welcome. Thank you.

Cover Photo: David Slotto Cover Art: Victoria Slotto

Cover Photo: David Slotto
Cover Art: Victoria Slotto

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34 thoughts on “Freedom–dVerse Form for All

  1. Jamie Dedes says:

    You really applied your imagination to this one. LOL! What a story is implied there. Bravo! 🙂

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  2. Well that was surprising. Makes me want to read at least 55 more words!

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  3. G-Man says:

    Oh yeah…Troubled!!
    Welcome to the Friday Funfest.
    You have created a Flash Fiction Masterpiece
    Loved your Mysterious 55
    Thanks for playing, please play again
    Have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  4. ManicDdaily says:

    Agh. Awful. (Not awful story in terms of telling, but the story itself.) Compacted and tightly told. Thanks, Victoria – and many congrats. k.

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  5. kelvin s.m. says:

    …oh, this bothers me for its tragic & brutal arrangement Victoria… so much are left in question….

    …and oh, congratz on the new release…. loved the cover photo… smiles…

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  6. shanyns says:

    Damn – invisible child. Wow. Very powerful stuff here. And congratulations on your book.

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  7. Akila says:

    oh! lovely piece. some hard facts here typically of the teenage mind

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  8. Susan says:

    Yikes! Succinct and powerful. I will check out your book.

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  9. Tony Maude says:

    Very dark – what a world we live in when this is the reality of life for some people.

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  10. grapeling says:

    Smokin’ good write, Victoria ~ M

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  11. A dramatic piece for sure, the bluntness really emphasises the boys situation…A brilliant piece of flash fiction! 🙂

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  12. Victoria, DAMN this was well written. You chose your words wisely and painted a vivid portrait of horror, abuse, and a dash of paranoia in 55 words. Brill! Amy

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  13. nico says:

    Nice work, dark and twisted. It’s hard to judge to toll of neglect–until something like this happens.

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  14. margaret says:

    …yes, a novel packed in 55!

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  15. wolfsrosebud says:

    Sad… but congrats on your book

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  16. Home run! That’s how to do it – that’s a whole movie right there.

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  17. One of those stories where I’m unsure whether to be happy or sad at the end. Happy for his freedom, for nothing is worse than living without love of one’s parents. Sad that it comes down to this, and yet we hear of these things more often, abuse by a parent, the ultimate betrayal.
    Well done edit, it gets to right to the crux of the story. And congratulations on your new Kindle book!!

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  18. kkkkaty1 says:

    Great, sharp telling of how some children find themselves caught in this despicable web of abuse and can’t handle it…they don’t have all the tools to lead their lives yet…so no chance for them…stirring story..congrats on your book, Victoria!

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  19. Gabriella says:

    You have depicted this tragedy – or rather these tragedies – in a haunting way. Very powerful piece!

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  20. That is so sad, thanks for the backgrounder ~ I hope he is able to find his way back to the light ~ Dark and short, with us wanting to know more ~

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  21. vbholmes says:

    “they didn’t even know he existed.” So reminiscent of contemporary stories of newly-freed kidnapped girls/women. Man can be a cruel animal.

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  22. brian miller says:

    oh dang…now that is quite the mystery…and it def begs for more to be said….wonder what it was that got them there…and how gramma got in on it…ha….def a good short story in this one….smiles..nice and intense vic

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  23. This is so dark. and as I often say… I love stories were a real story is just hinted.. and yes I can see an abused child hidden,

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  24. Rhonda says:

    oh yikes. This said so much…no one suspects him, because…argh .. leaves the reader wanting to peek at the rest of the story 🙂 Wonderfully done.

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  25. howanxious says:

    Ah… great job. I liked the dark theme. It is one of my favorite themes that I work on.

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  26. Gay Cannon says:

    I got all that – (a possible Lizzie Borden story) brought up to date – in a time when we are still trying to throw light on what happens in dark houses behind closed doors. Very tight work, Victoria. Also congrats on the book!

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  27. aka_andrea says:

    this one started with a punch and never eased up a bit~
    great job

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  28. Talicha J. says:

    very interesting. dark indeed. thank you for sharing 🙂

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  29. claudia says:

    oh heck victoria… this is dark…i wasn’t prepared for how this developed…ugh… what a sad, sad story..
    and wow…you made it…congrats on the book.. that’s awesome

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  30. Mary says:

    Wow, what a sad story….filled with dramatic intensity! I wonder why his existence wasn’t known.

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