Fred Needs a Sub for Poker Night

Here’s a Flash 55 for G-Man. Stop over and write one of your own. It’s a great editing exercise!

Photo: Wikipedia Commons

Photo: Wikipedia Commons

Fred Needs a Sub for Poker Night

“Today’s Friday.”

“So what?” Chuck snapped.

“It’s our date night.”

“Why do we need a date night? We’re together all the time.”

“We need to fall in love again.”

“Pick another day. I’m subbing for poker tonight.”

Chuck grabbed his jacket and left without a kiss.

Charlotte waited before dialing Fred.

“It worked. We’re on.”


9 thoughts on “Fred Needs a Sub for Poker Night

  1. Margaret says:

    AMAZING ending! Perfect 55


  2. scillagrace says:

    Ooh, nice ending. Very O. Henry.


  3. brian miller says:

    hahaha. two can play at that game eh? when you arent gonna pay attention to me i will give my attention to another…


  4. Haha! That was an unexpected twist.. or maybe not, given the stereotypical inattentive husband.


  5. kaykuala says:

    Chuckles! laughed on it! Nicely Victoria!



  6. G-Man says:

    Very saucy tale…Fantastic!!
    You wrote the perfect Flash Fiction 55
    Thank you so much for this interesting little story
    (And I LOVE stories over poetry)
    Have a Kick Ass Week-End


  7. Mary says:

    Ha, I laughed out loud at the end, Victoria!! Perfection.


  8. annotating60 says:

    Victoria, that was very good.>KB


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