What Goes Around


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What Goes Around

The rising sun signaled the opening of a new day. Lily stretched, trying to clear her head of the jumbled remnants of last night’s sad dream that merged with blurred memories of the previous evening.

She reached over to Ned but touched only the wrinkles of the space that should have held his lanky frame. That’s when she recalled her irritation at his disclosure of his plans for the morning, blurted out when she was trying to fall asleep.

At what point had it all gone south? When had he replaced their flamboyant,, early morning love-making with frequent rounds of golf. And when had the sound of ennui taken the place of the bliss with which he used to speak her name?

Had it been like that for Nora, his first wife, the one he’d left to be with her each Thursday, before the world was awake?

She’d warned him, Nora had, of Ned’s voracious appetite for “golf.”

 

I’m submitting this in response to Brenda’s Wordle response on The Sunday Whirl and also for this week’s Monday Meanderings. If you haven’t visited The Sunday Whirl, give it a whirl! I haven’t been there for a while but it’s a chance to challenge yourself writing either poetry or short fiction.

There were the words: last, signal, disclose, point, irritation, jumbled, sound, appetite, sun, time, bliss, flamboyant.

Have a happy week!

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17 thoughts on “What Goes Around

  1. Jamie Dedes says:

    Well rounded flow .. . with a bite at the end a moral as well. Bravo! 🙂 Enjoyed.

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  2. ManicDdaily says:

    Golf widow! The guy better take care or the woman here may respond like T. Woods’ wife! With putter or worse, some Iron(y). k.

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  3. Pamela says:

    Nice truth in this, Victoria. Wonderful to see you at The Whirl again.

    Pamela

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  4. Well written story of games, Victoria! Loved it!

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  5. 1sojournal says:

    Voracious appetites can easily become addictions, or hide them. Well-knit story.

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/

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  6. Wow. What a strong ending! Excellent sound throughout; very well-written piece. I was going to say how rough it is to have to compare yourself to a first wife and then got to that ending. Man, in this case, the comparisons and similarities are so much worse!

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  7. jae rose says:

    What a wonderfully complete story..a real circle…I suppose what goes around comes around…sadly at times

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  8. This is a brilliant use of the wordle words. A sad story, but probably more common than we could imagine. Good title, too.

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  9. seingraham says:

    Nicely told; a bit of a cautionary tale, it feels like maybe? Hmm.

    http://whenthepenbleeds.blogspot.ca/2014/08/one-tires.html

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  10. rmp says:

    that is definitely an interesting golf game he has going on there. I’m torn between feeling sorry for Lily and not so much…

    very nicely told story.

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  11. […] What Goes Around August 3rd, 2014 — “What Goes Around The rising sun signaled the opening of a new day. Lily stretched, trying to clear her head of the jumbled remnants of last nights sad dream that merged with blurred memories of the previous evening. She reached over to Ned but touched only the wrinkles of the space that should have held […]” 5 Comments […]

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  12. Excellent Victoria, wordle’s are such fun to play with. I shall do mine in my afternoon.

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  13. oldegg says:

    I don’t know what he’s like at golf but she knew she had found damaged goods with him. Stop crying, get out of bed and start anew.

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  14. humbird says:

    Oh, I love the silk of your expressions, how you worked them in such simple short story…amazing! ~ Glad, Victoria, you are back to Sunday Whirl ! ~ Thanks for kind comment.

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  15. Irene says:

    Yes, what Brian said. Gotta watch that appetite.

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  16. brian miller says:

    ouch. wonder if he got a hole in one…err…or at least did better than tiger did today…yep, gotta watch those voracious appetites…ha

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