Ten for tenWord


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It’s my turn to tend the bar for dVerse Poets’ Pub Meeting the Bar and for today’s prompt, I’ve gone back to the future and borrowed a form that Brian Miller created–the tenWord. Stop in and link up here, Thursday at 3:00 PM EST. Stop by–hopefully with a poem of your own, or just to read what others are sharing. I’m posting my poem in advance to give you a head start, if you like. (Don’t tell anyone, okay)? 

Ten for tenWord

i.
the mountains
wrap themselves in mist—
a gauzy, white scarf.

ii.
your eyes speak to me
of untold pain,
of loss.

iii.
hot coffee
seeps throughout my body
and awakens my spirit.

iv.
a dark, overcast sky
covers the valley
with oppressive stillness.

v.
early morning—
the first dove call,
urgent, longing—without answer.

vi.
waiting rooms—
anxiety and impatience—
let’s get it over with.

vii.
lantana sprawls
underneath the trumpet vines,
purple and yellow blooms.

viii.
desert rains—
light sprinkles tickle.
we wish for a downpour.

ix.
a swath of white clouds
encircles
the Santa Rosa mountains.

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38 thoughts on “Ten for tenWord

  1. My favourite is number (iii). The taste of coffee indeed gives us a taste of bitterness, and that taste may provoke a feeling of rage. I drink a lot of coffee.

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  2. whimsygizmo says:

    Ohhhhh. That gauzy, white scarf will stay with me. What a gorgeous description!

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  3. humbird says:

    Love the image of first stanza, neat style in all of them.

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  4. janu says:

    So many feelings and emotions…very deep.

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  5. Barry Dawson says:

    A deep feeling of loneliness and longing, but also contemplative, and centered in a quiet contentment. These are really really good. Masterfully crafted.My faves are the 1st 3.

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  6. ManicDdaily says:

    Lovely–I especially found the waiting room and the coffee compelling–Thanks, Victoria and thanks for the prompt. k .

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  7. ds says:

    Lovely. The morning call of the dove was especially moving. Thank you.

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  8. Anna says:

    Pure poetry! Thanks for the fun prompt it’s certainly inspired people to write well in form.

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  9. Poet Laundry says:

    The first and the last are especially beautiful to me. v. and vi. are so excellently expressive. And mmm…coffee is like that–and you made me want to have some more today!

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  10. Other Mary says:

    These are all well done, a wide range of subjects, themes and emotions. I think my favorites are the first three, but as I said, all are wonderful. This was just the prompt I needed too – thank you!

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  11. Steve Shultz says:

    Wonderful snippets! So many of these speak to me, but I think my favorites are 2, 4, and 6. Well done.

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  12. Thank you for this prompt, Victoria – love these little delicious morsels of verse –

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  13. kaykuala h says:

    The 6th is always an irritant that I remember well. Patience is always provoked here. Great lines in all Victoria!

    Hank

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  14. Misky says:

    Coffee, no doubt, the coffee poem. 🙂

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  15. rythaephua says:

    I’m awe, this is a master piece.

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  16. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) says:

    Beautiful and haiku-like.

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  17. I particularly liked the first and the seventh one. You expressed different feelings with a careful image in every verse. Great job. 🙂 And thanks for the prompt on dVerse.
    -HA

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  18. Bryan Ens says:

    these are all good, Victoria. I resonate with the third one especially…coffee! 🙂

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  19. Truedessa says:

    I really like the first one..Those mountains can look very majestic in a white scarf.

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  20. Gabriella says:

    I like how you wrote poems that stand on their own and are also part of a whole that gives us glimpses into your life and reality.

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  21. Thanks for reviving that prompt. I enjoyed all of yours.

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  22. Perfect! Your words always bring a smile to earth and all of us poets.

    You delivered this piece so good and wonderfully.

    🙂

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  23. Oh! I love the gauzy, white scarf, and that hot coffee! Great writing!

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  24. The “Waiting rooms” one really haunts me…

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  25. billgncs says:

    It just amazes me what depth people can reach in just ten words

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  26. Kathy Reed says:

    These are fantastic sentences…like C says, tiny pictures.

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  27. Glenn Buttkus says:

    Perfect high desert Nevada-like gems, & wonderful uses of Brian’s imaginative form. I, too, like the first stanza, & the fifth. With my Miller’s Dozen, I accompanied each with one of my photographs; more fun that way; thanks for creating Funtime.

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  28. claudia says:

    oh they’re awesome victoria… each a little painting… my fav i think (even though not easy to choose) is the one with the gauzy, white mist scarf… and i need some more coffee…smiles

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  29. Mary says:

    What a lovely set, Victoria. You have made aspects of your landscape come alive, plus shared the reality of life as well (thinking of the one about the waiting room)! Great prompt.

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  30. Grace says:

    I specially love the early dove call and the lantana ~ Love the poetic offerings Victoria & thanks for hosting ~

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  31. brian miller says:

    oh delicious….love the personification a bit in the first one…th emountains wrapping themselves in scarves….i need more hot coffee seeping in to my body…haha

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  32. What an excellent set.. I find that as each micropoem creates a scene or a moment (just like haiku does) I find the sequence intriguing in that I want to connect the dots into a complete narrative. Then number ii and iv becomes key.. I just wonder how it would work if they came in the reverse order.. hmm. I see keen observation and a heavy burden between the different observations.

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  33. Good things gan in sma’ bulk, as Jock would say, and your mini poems are a prime example!

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  34. wolfsrosebud says:

    I think of the word “haven” in this piece. If it weren’t for the fact I know you’ve gone south to get-away-from-it-all, I would have also have guessed a “haven” from a medical trial. Either way, it’s important to drink in the many neat places in the states.

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  35. lynn__ says:

    Your nine verses of ten words each ache with beauty, with pain and hope…i will think on this prompt, Victoria!

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  36. “Today’s prompt” is actually for tomorrow (Thursday).

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