sometimes i am so happy it hurts–dVerse Monday Quadrille

sometimes i am so happy it hurts
a quadrille

yesterday i am
play of shadow and of light
sunset’s watercolor sky

fragile day-lily
letting go her brief yet lovely life

today the texture of a sturdy bark
free flow of cool water
tiny finch whose song is all she has

This week, for the Monday Quadrille prompt at dVerse, Lillian challenges us to paint a self-portrait in exactly 44 words. Whew.

The title of this poem came to me last evening while I was doing dishes, looking out the kitchen window where my husband kept watch over our two small white dogs, romping in the grass. This morning, when I woke up, the poem appeared.

Please join us for this most challenging prompt. This week there is no word that we have to use. Have fun.

38 thoughts on “sometimes i am so happy it hurts–dVerse Monday Quadrille

  1. rosemawrites says:

    this is one great poem. ❤


  2. Mish says:

    I love that you ended with “today”…these precious moments of the present. A nice addition with the little bird song. 🙂


  3. I know that feeling. My heart is so full that I can actually feel it. If I let myself think about how happy I am, I think about losing all that is making me happy and then a heaviness replaces or sits on top of that full feeling. That’s what hurts, I think.

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  4. Bryan Ens says:

    Really like your approach of writing your portrait in terms of past, future, present. Like a triptych painting!


  5. Janet says:

    Gorgeous wordplay.


  6. bkmackenzie says:

    I love your today “texture of study bark” full of the past and the hopes of tomorrow….thank you…bkm


  7. Thank you, Victoria, this is beautiful with the finch song!


  8. Imelda says:

    Today, today is special and the best. 🙂 Lovely piece here, Victoria.


  9. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

    What a breath-takingly beautiful self-portrait!


  10. Wonderful. Yesterday, tomorrow, today… Ever becoming but living in the moment singing her own distinctive song


  11. Softly spoken. Wonderful.


  12. kim881 says:

    That is so beautiful, Victoria.


  13. Sumana Roy says:

    achingly beautiful…from sunset sky to fragile day lily and wealthy with a tiny finch song….


  14. …so happy it hurts? We should all be in such pain, Victoria! Love this!


  15. ghostmmnc says:

    Love your poem! We have these little finches come to our backyard feeder every day. Such a happy tune!


  16. How I love this poem, and the song of the finch, so beautiful. I LOVE “tiny finch, whose song is all she has.” Reminds me of the quote – a bird does not sing because it has an answer. It sings because it has a song.


  17. Grace says:

    I love each part, so beautifully weaved with nature and your heart. And that ending line, just sings 🙂


  18. Beautiful words.


  19. lillian says:

    Love the yesterday, today, tomorrow orgnization of this! A tiny finch? I think not — your words, your artful poetry make you at least as big as an emu — but MUCH more graceful! 🙂


  20. jillys2016 says:

    There is something so “Poem Crazy” about this, Victoria. I love the soft brush strokes of the three stages and the bird is total perfection for the post!


  21. Charley says:

    Sky, water… you are very… elemental. A wonderfully visual piece; although your imagery speaks to other senses as well. Love the bird song!


  22. It is such happiness to see care-free joy romping outside and still being given a protective eye by hubby.



  23. brian miller says:

    very nice. i like each of your 3 panels in this and how you use each to tell a story of a time – and how you use nature to tell it. realizing our song is all we have – i think there is a bit of humility in that. smiles.

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  24. Sue says:

    Lovely write Victoria, and penned so quickly!….oh that I could write a poem again!

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  25. Bodhirose says:

    I’m taken by the fact that her song is all she has…and that you were so happy it hurt. I love this beauty, Victoria.


  26. kanzensakura says:

    This is perfect. You did such a lively job. Mine is so clunky. I like the person in this poem so very much. The last line clutches at my heart, that beautiful finch whose song is so brave and bright.

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  27. It certainly is the most beautiful of songs. Bravo, Victoria


  28. p.s. says:

    This is excellent, Victoria. I’m especially enamored of the opening line. I’m thoroughly enjoying reading this over and over again while I listen to your little birdy sing its precious, tender, but strong heart-song.


  29. The birdsong takes a moment to get going. Hope you will listen.


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