of a gray september day


Photo: V. Slotto

Photo: V. Slotto

of a gray september day

this early morning
(pewter-skied day),
i long for shadow-slices
undulating among rocky crags,
swooping into tree trunk crevices,
unraveling ribbons
of golden sunshine–
light tickled by grass threads.

yesterday, they clung sensually
to a solitary rose,
her beauty now swept
beneath a leaden shroud.

Photo: V. Slotto

Photo: V. Slotto

My favorite prompt, the Quadrille, a 44-word poem (exactly, exclusive of the title)! This week De is looking for the word SHADOW in the poem itself. Stop by dVersePoets Pub with your Quadrille and sip delight by reading the submissions of other poets, sharing comments, too. The prompt is open all week.

 

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35 thoughts on “of a gray september day

  1. kiwinana says:

    Beautiful poetry. I have never written a Quadrille, must try, most of my poetry is tanka, which I enjoy writing.

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  2. Beautiful! I can so relate to that longing for shadows when the skies have turned gray.

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  3. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

    Gorgeously descriptive, using words in original ways to create what resonates as perfectly right.

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  4. Truedessa says:

    The photo is lovely, shadow slices that is quite unique and I can pictures shadows through light.

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  5. Shadow
    respite
    for animals
    who kNow how
    to escape to
    dArk
    oF Sun..
    hmm.. humans
    bake.. no longer
    turning.. Insanity
    reigns aWay
    from
    Shadow Sun..:)

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  6. I liked “shadow-slices.” Lovely poem!

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  7. Misky says:

    I really like “unraveling ribbons” of sunshine. That’s a gorgeous phrase.

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  8. A beautiful poem Victoria, thank you so much for sharing :o)

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  9. maria says:

    Love the presence of time in this piece. It makes you appreciate it even more. 🙂

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  10. rosemawrites says:

    breathtaking imagery, Ma’am. ❤

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  11. Mish says:

    Gorgeous imagery. I love “pewter-skied day” and “light tickled by grass threads” as well as the contrast you offered with the rose.

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  12. Great photo! I love “shadow-slices.”

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  13. Candy says:

    ‘unraveling ribbons of golden sunshine’ such a perfect description

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  14. Bryan Ens says:

    A delightful autumn piece.

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  15. frankhubeny says:

    I liked the phrase “shadow-slices”..

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  16. Bodhirose says:

    What an exquisite quadrille, Victoria. Your description is so clear I can picture those shadows playing when the sunlight brought them to life. Now turned to shroud, the day is colorless and grey…beautiful!

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  17. Glenn Buttkus says:

    A terrific poem, creating so much with so few words, giving a concise poetic peek into the Nevada juxtaposition of weather & temperament.

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  18. Grace says:

    I believe we are having the same sky – pewter-skied day – How I long for the ribbons of golden sunshine ~ Love your share Victoria ~

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  19. I enjoyed the “longing for shadow-slices” imagery undulating, swooping and unraveling; the counterpoint to the sudden loss, the rose beneath the leaden shroud.
    Nice work.
    Randy

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  20. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous, write Victoria 😀

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  21. Quadrille is my favorite as well. We are having this gray day today; Autumn has come.

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  22. lillian says:

    “Unraveling ribbons of golden sunshine”. Such a beautiful image!

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  23. Shadows can have so many qualities about them. I do like them, at least as much as the clear light.

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  24. Brian says:

    Made me go mmmmm. The image of the rocks enduring combined with the transient glory of the rose. Beautiful words.

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  25. […] My original response to this prompt is here. […]

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  26. Following the shadows into all the crevices,nooks and crannies and then the rose. Just wonderful!

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  27. “pewter skied day” – yes, yes, yes, that is perfect. I love the way the shadow and the sunlight are inextricably linked in this poem.

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  28. I love this… how you make the shadow into shroud, and the memory of that rose… this is so much more than weather…

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  29. kim881 says:

    Now that’s superb, Victoria: ‘shadow-slices/undulating among rocky crags’ and ‘light tickled by grass threads’! I didn’t need the fabulous photo – the poem spoke for itself.

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  30. whimsygizmo says:

    SWOON. Gorgeousness, Victoria.
    Are you kidding me with this?:
    “pewter-skied day”

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  31. thefeatheredsleep says:

    Beautiful

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  32. Love this line: light tickled by grass threads. Beautiful!

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  33. thotpurge says:

    yesterday, they clung sensually
    to a solitary rose,
    her beauty now swept
    beneath a leaden shroud….beautiful and the image as well!!!

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  34. Sue says:

    Well penned, Victoria, and a lovely image too

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  35. Sabiscuit says:

    Lovely photo, Victoria. I love rocks in a garden. I hope you’ll have a great week ahead. xo

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