Intaglio-2–dVerse Poetics


Photo: artandpractice.com

Photo: artandpractice.com

Intaglio-2

there are seasons—
times when pain is etched
upon our copper-souls
with a sharp stylus

moments when the heavy
shroud of sorrow
oppresses those we love

like those black clouds
rolling into our meadow

like the slow flow of the river
fighting winter chill

Please join us at dVerse Poetics where we are poem-ing about TIME. I’ve chosen to use the Quadrille form and included the word Time. The doors open at 3:00 PM EST.

 

Advertisements

23 thoughts on “Intaglio-2–dVerse Poetics

  1. Ava Hypatia says:

    Thank you for writing in a simple and searing way that reaches into the cold blackness (for me), a place to visit but hopefully not to stay.

    Like

  2. We have all been in this stretch of time… Very well written.

    Like

  3. Teresa says:

    Beautiful emotional poem.

    Like

  4. lynn__ says:

    Hard to “like”such pain, yet your metaphors bring clarity into the pathos. You give witness and it touches my heart.

    Like

  5. Mark says:

    Our copper souls…those words will stay with me all day. Nicely done.

    Like

  6. Pain.now..
    so many
    coLors FeeLinGs
    numBinG2..
    senses
    gone Sun
    burnt ice
    cOld
    liGht and
    DaRk giVinG
    forEver now numBinG liGht..
    Death and BiRth sAMe culprits
    oF an iLLuSiVe
    labEL naMed
    tiMe.. as waves
    And tides and oThEr
    pArts oF NaTuRe
    free exiSting
    oNLy
    noW
    ’till gONE..
    travEL..noW..
    As cruCible oF StAR
    BuRSt seNtiEnt StAR
    DuST plUS coMes Back to DancE
    And SinG..
    A Longer
    SonG oF AiR..:)

    Like

  7. Misky says:

    Splendid, particularly that last stanza.

    Like

  8. Bryan Ens says:

    Love how you describe those times of pain in 4 different ways. Could be a mini Cubist poem.

    Like

  9. NJ says:

    Sorrow is echoed in every word here. It’s heart-wrenching.

    Like

  10. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    This is such an emotive and heartfelt write, Victoria. Sigh..the sense of pain and longing is tangible in “moments when the heavy shroud of sorrow oppresses those we love” Big hugs!

    Like

  11. Truedessa says:

    I like the opening lines they are penned perfectly, I never thought of having copper souls yet it fits.

    Like

  12. Waltermarks says:

    I like the last two lines: “like the slow flow of the river
    fighting winter chill”. Just like a river fighting the icing grip of Winter. That’s gripping!

    Like

  13. kanzensakura says:

    I felt this poem in the marrow of my bones. Such a beautiful poem about sorrow.

    Like

  14. Oh Victoria, this is emotionally draining. I love the reference to copper.

    Like

  15. Deeply emotive writing. So much beauty to describe sorrow.

    Like

  16. Beautiful and heartfelt sorrow in here, sending you love and prayers xxx

    Like

  17. Glenn Buttkus says:

    You remind me of the reason for the season, and that so many of us are boomers, already into the autumn or winter of our own lives. Like Kim, I got hooked at the first stanza. For me now, my grandchildren remind me daily that at some point we need to step aside & let them build a new world.

    Like

  18. Grace says:

    Opening lines are just gorgeous Victoria ~ That heavy shroud of sorrow is ever so present ~

    Like

  19. kim881 says:

    Gorgeous, Victoria, especially the lines:
    ‘times when pain is etched
    upon our copper-souls
    with a sharp stylus’.

    Like

  20. lillian says:

    Abolutely beautiful! Especially “like the slow flow of the river fighting winter chill”
    I’m reminded that this merry season is anything but for many people. Your poem is timely in that way and very very heartfelt.

    Like

  21. This is such a strong description of sorrow, and in the way you have used the metaphors of nature to describe…

    Like

  22. And still there is something so profound in those times. Most of my greatest work rides on those winds that come from the place of pain.

    Like

  23. Sue says:

    Very heartfelt, Victoria…

    Like

Your comment and feedback are important to me. Thank you.

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s