Circus Song–dVerse Pantoum


Photo: David Slotto

Circus Song

If life’s a circus, love, then we’re the clowns,
tossed in this hurly-burly neon light.
Rollercoaster madness keeps us bound,
never free of new-moon darkest night.

Rip me from hurly-burly neon light.
Dance me into the sweetest sounds,
free now of new-moon darkest night.
Steal me to meadows, daisy-crowned.

Dance me beauty of life’s sweetest sounds;
leave behind this darkness and its fright.
Green meadows, gift me, daisy-crowned;
dream me a future that is bright.

Let’s leave behind the darkness and its fright,
this rollercoaster madness holds us bound.
Let’s dream another future, shining bright.
This life’s a circus, dear, and we’re the clowns.

Written and posted for Gina’s prompt for dVerse Form Challenge: Pantoum.

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32 thoughts on “Circus Song–dVerse Pantoum

  1. calmkate says:

    This is great writing, your words weave this form so very well!

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  2. This Pantoum form can be so diverse! I love your circus metaphors and the madness of our addictions to the drama. If we are the clowns just fooling around, just entertaining each other it creates a message of being fooled by too much too. Great I love it!

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  3. Mish says:

    I like the voice and the use of “love” and “dear”….a slight sarcasm without losing the seriousness of the message. Your example of the form is inspiring.

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  4. Just Barry says:

    This circus song reads as a lullaby of light. Lovely visuals and sentiment.

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  5. merrildsmith says:

    This is a beautiful pantoum. It flows like a song, and I can imagine it put to music.
    It made me think of Sondheim’s “Send in the Clowns,” and Cohen’s “Dance Me to the End of Love”–and weirdly, we saw a clown leaving the lobby of my mom’s building on Thursday, and a friend went to see a dance performance to Leonard Cohen.

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  6. annell4 says:

    A lovely poem…so true.

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  7. Oloriel says:

    I love the way you used the form to weave emotions, and I find the last stanza to be very comforting.

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  8. Rip me, dance me, steal me, dream me…I love this!

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  9. memadtwo says:

    Send in the clowns! this evokes so many wonderful images. (K)

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  10. Truedessa says:

    Let’s dream another future, shining bright

    oh, yes let us all dream of better days…

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  11. rothpoetry says:

    A wonderful poem. I liked how you did the repetition, but changed the lines slightly each time.

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  12. L. Stevens says:

    The circus theme goes well with the full circle repeated lines. Well done!

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  13. sdtp33 says:

    beautifully crafted pantoum!

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  14. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice focus of the pantoum on a circus and we being the clowns.

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  15. V.J. Knutson says:

    Bravo! Circus air to it, yet delivered with substance.

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  16. Colleen@ LOOSELEAFNOTES says:

    I like the temp and play. Clowns it is today!

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  17. Well, bring in the clowns! A remarkable pantoum!

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  18. This is a lovely up-beat poem and I like the transformations of the repeated lines.

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  19. sanaarizvi says:

    This is sheer perfection, Victoria! ❤️

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  20. Glenn Buttkus says:

    Pantoum perfection indeed. You inspire and entertain with equal grace. All I can say is “Bring in the clowns”.

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  21. kim881 says:

    Your pantoum is well-formed and beautifully executed, Victoria, and I love the circus theme. I especially enjoyed the ‘hurly-burly neon light’, the daisy-crowned meadows and the way the whole poem addresses the reader.

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  22. msjadeli says:

    A wake-up call with a message of hope is a beautiful thing. I like the words you used and how you wove the ideas with them.

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  23. Sabio Lantz says:

    Very, very nice. I love the parenthetical inclusion of “,dear” and the clown reference within this crazy life.

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  24. that first line is so powerful!!! i felt the twists and turns, Ma’am!

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  25. Gina says:

    love your title so much! you have used the repetition of chosen phrases and syllables to make this is most engaging pantoum. it flows gracefully Victoria.

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  26. This is just lovely … I do love how you turned the questions in the beginning to an affirmation…

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  27. ayala says:

    A beautiful poem.

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  28. Grace says:

    Love the sounds of your pantoum and the slight twist to the ending line. This was a light take, a dance of beauty against the darkness and fright. Thanks for a fine example of this form Victoria.

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  29. robtkistner says:

    Life is a carnival, believe it or not. Life is a carnival twobits a shot

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    • robtkistner says:

      Send in the clowns – don’t bother, they’re here!
      This was an excellent pantoum Victoria, well written. It put me in mind of a couple songs. The Band’s “Life Is A Carnival”, and Judy Collins’ “Send In The Clowns”. I enjoyed your work here!

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  30. kanzensakura says:

    You do a lovely pantoum girlfriend!

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