Temptation


Adam and Eve

Adam and Eve (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

Temptation
An Acrostic

(Eve)

Try not to think of how you’ll feel tomorrow,
Even God can’t know the wonder of this fruit.

(Adam)

My dear, don’t you remember words of warning?

(Eve)

Perhaps God’s trying to keep us from the truth.
Take this; come on. Just try a morsel.
A snake told me that we would be just fine.
The Tree of Life has nothing like this apple.
Indeed, it offers neither food nor wine.

(Adam)

Only a tiny bite, only this one time.
No one will ever know. HEY, this one’s mine!

An old one, linked now to dVerse Poetics where Mary tempts us to write about, what else, temptation. Crawl on over and see if you can resist!

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29 thoughts on “Temptation

  1. dragonkatet says:

    This was wonderfully penned, Victoria! 🙂

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  2. Victoria, I think you’ve captured the essence falling into temptation perfectly!

    Blessings ~ Wendy

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  3. janehewey says:

    clever and quirky, i love it!

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  4. David King says:

    Love the style of this, and the voices.

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  5. Well done! A story as old as time. Reminds me of the birthday postcards my Methodist grandmother would send. She would use the letters of my name to begin a Bible verse. That would be her birthday greeting to me. My fondness for acrostics waned after several years of those! 😉

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  6. alan1704 says:

    Well written and great insight to what want went on. Very interesting.

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  7. Akila says:

    A crisp rendition!

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  8. We should always trust in god and keep our mind strong.

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  9. souldipper says:

    Clever! With a punch. And so it began…mine, mine, mine.

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  10. Truedessa says:

    temptation displayed with a bit of humor that all can relate to..loved the format..

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  11. Kelvin S.M. says:

    …you summed it all up… the entire story was excellently wrapped to reach out easily the understanding of the modern generation… i am impressed especially when i read it was done through accrostics… loved it… smiles…

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  12. viv blake says:

    Two
    Use
    This

    To
    Understand
    Temptation

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  13. dragyonfly says:

    “Even God cant know the wonder of this fruit” is my favorite line here…but it is very full of wondrous lines and images. The word play (acrostic) is clever, too.

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  14. WONDERFUL DEPICTION OF TEMPTATION

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  15. Adura Ojo says:

    “Try not to think of how you’ll feel tomorrow”
    So true! That’s how temptation gets its green card right there! It starts with complete amnesia regarding consequences…until later.

    http://adura-ojo.blogspot.co.uk/2013/04/the-snake.html

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  16. ManicDdaily says:

    Sounds pretty good the way they explain it – very clever. k.

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  17. wolfsrosebud says:

    loved the humor and honesty in this

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  18. Oooh nice acrostic and it only takes one little bite and then… Cool poem indeed!

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  19. Great conversational acrostic!

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  20. nice spend on the garden .

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  21. Mary says:

    It does seem if one person is tempted that that person tries to tempt others to join in. Not only true in the Garden of Eden, but in today’s world as well. If someone is drinking heavily, they try to encourage others to do the same. Those tempted who ‘fall’ never like to fall alone. Glad to see you, Victoria. Loved your acrostic!

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  22. Jamie Dedes says:

    “only a tiny bite” eh? … Bravo, Victoria. Nicely done …
    Jamie

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  23. Laurie Kolp says:

    The utimate temptation expressed beautifully. I love the way you separated the acrostic with a conversation.

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  24. claudia says:

    ha…it hasn’t changed so much…eh… just once…no one will know and see anyway…what has xx to offer anyway compared to this…well played and cool work on putting it into an acrostic

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  25. I like the acrostic Victoria ~ Indeed it all starts with a tiny bit, only this one time ~

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  26. kip says:

    Clever!

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  27. brian miller says:

    ha. no different than us trying to rationalize our temptation eh? smiles…not only an acrostic but you did it in dialogue…very cool….

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