Loss
Leaves cover earth’s body,
languish on her chilled skin.
Lashed by October winds
Lonely branches reach up
longing to touch a star.
Lavish foliage falls,
listlessly surrenders.
dVerse Meeting the Bar‘s prompt, offered by Vandana Sharma, asks us to write a Pleiades–a form that calls for seven lines of six syllables, each line beginning with the same first letter as the one-word title. Reference to the cosmos is encouraged.
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Victoria C. Slotto, Author 
ooh…I like this. love the idea of earth’s chilled skin and branches reaching to touch the stars.
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I’ve been seeing those seven sisters each night in New Mexico…until last night when the rain washed them away.
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I adore your lines/image of /Lonely branches reach up/
longing to touch a star/. So many of you did the proper syllable count I feel kind of silly disregarding it.
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Groovy piece- it captured the season perfectly. Love- “Lonely branches reach up / longing to touch a star.”
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“Languish on her chilled skin”—-oooh….powerful. And the idea of listless surrender….you have captured the desolation of the season effectively!
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autumn is a season that seems symbolic of loss. Beautiful words Victoria
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Love the melancholia here…the longing…
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They try but not all will succeed. All too familiar with Autumn fast approaching! Great write Victoria!
Hank
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Sad autumn poem with excellent use of the form.
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Great earth poem.
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This is lovely..I think we all long to touch a star..
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Ah, Victoria. So nice to see you at Poets United too. Smiles.
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Beautiful late autumn poem – wistful and lovely
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I like this very much. Beautiful work.
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I like this tribute to autumn.
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So beautifully sad.
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Beautiful, particularly your two opening lines.
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How lovely this is, how well you have captured the days of Autumn’s final surrender. Your choice of words is beautiful. Especially love the imagery of the bared branches:
“Lonely branches reach up
longing to touch a star.”
And so Autumn surrenders.
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Victoria… loved the mood this gave… gentle like a slow falling leaf
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I love that part of wanting to touch the star ~ Perfect for autumn Victoria ~
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Beauiful! My Midweek Prompt at Poets United is “Trees”–I would love to see this longing and surrender there too. Consider posting it?
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Seasons teach us many things ans autumn is one season of teaching us” letting go of”.
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ah the autumn foliage..it sure makes one feel lonely seeing the bare trees..beautiful lines
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love this autumnal tune..
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Your lovely poem almost makes me want to have a go at the Pleiades (which had not so far inspired me). I love the Autumn, but dread what follows!
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I like the image of the leaves becoming a blanket for the cold earth.. It makes it worth while despite the hardness of seeing the colors go.
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‘listlessly surrendering’ is just how it seems…pretty Pleiades poem.
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Bravo!
Good luck with the new blog, Victoria.
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that one felt just right, you really nailed the meter
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Oh, it is very sad when that foliage falls though….I should be used to it by now, but each year I mourn a bit at this time of year.
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nice…like how you subtlely worked the star in…another seasonal piece…hoping that we have just a bit longer so the colors get really bright before the falling….nice job on the form v…
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I like how the lavish foliage falls.
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Lovely evocation of autumn.
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