perfection isn’t


Photo: arievendervelden.com

Photo: arievendervelden.com

perfection isn’t

raucous stellar jay punctuates the silence

sets ablaze the dead maple with electric blue.

 

i miss the lauds of mockingbird

humbly clothed in gray and white.

Photo: Wikipedia

Photo: Wikipedia

Linked to dVerse MTB where we are playing with contrasts.

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22 thoughts on “perfection isn’t

  1. Jamie Dedes says:

    Simple but rather dramatic in it’s way. Well done, Victoria. I like it.

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  2. kaykuala says:

    Beautifully done Victoria in not so many words. That’s great!

    Hank

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  3. When I see a Jay I always think of Mark Twain’s “What Stumped the Blue Jays. … “Now, on top of all this, there’s another thing; a jay can out-swear any gentleman in the mines”. …

    Wonderful contrast of the two birds.

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  4. kanzensakura says:

    I do so like this. Using the birds with their plumage, voices – wonderful and interesting contrasts. Simple and right on point.

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  5. Who is to say what perfection is? Your poem really gets to the heart of that question with surgical precision. I am always in awe of how you make words bend to your will, V. 🙂 ❤

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  6. whimsygizmo says:

    LOVE this contrasting balance. Perfection.

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  7. humbird says:

    Haha…what a balance….the nature teaches us valuable lessons…and all of them (birds too) perfection! Love :)x

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  8. wolfsrosebud says:

    what would we be void of color…

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  9. Misky says:

    Lovely contrasts.

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  10. X says:

    Ha. So you have a preference for music. I hear you. I would hope to find morethng beyond beauty, beyond what is skin deep, you know.

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  11. el34ax7 says:

    I think the pictures, particularly of the mockingbird, really bring together the contrasts. The grey and white are absolutely majestic despite the modest feign.

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  12. DELL CLOVER says:

    Oh My, I LOVE your contrasts–gorgeous.

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  13. The colourful plumage is not really what gives a great singer. The jay might have its color but the mockingbird have the voice.

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  14. Perfection IS this little poem.

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  15. Susan says:

    Great contrasts of color and sound. Perhaps the mockingbird applauds the performances, and is so, the bluejay misses it too.

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  16. rmp says:

    never much thought about the call of different birds….though I do enjoy when you can pickup the call and response…sometimes I wonder what they’re saying.

    I do like the contrast in the first stanza of the jay puncturing the silence.

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  17. Gabriella says:

    I like how you appeal to our senses through colors and sounds, Victoria. ‘sets ablaze the dead maple with electric blue.” – my favorite line!

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  18. Ah.. yes.. i guess.. that is why the Mocking bird
    repeats what is said.. by birds.. the mask
    of colors.. come by beaks of others..:)

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  19. Mary says:

    I enjoyed the variation in the sounds of the two birds. I really love the look of the stellar jay.

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  20. Glenn Buttkus says:

    Wonderfully clever to give us contrasting images to heighten the opposition. We never see jays in W. WA.

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  21. C.C. says:

    Love the contrast between raucous and silence….it brings to mind a staccato effect….the raucous punctuating the silence in a sort of staccato sort of way. Lovely effect!

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