It’s been a while since I’ve responded to Robert Lee Brewer’s weekly poetry prompt, in fact, it’s been a while since I’ve written a poem. So here’s my attempt for yesterday’s in which he invited his followers to write a “Whatever…” poem. If you are a poet, I strongly recommend his blog, part of the Writer’s Digest site. You can access through my blog roll.
I have not edited this poem–I welcome your critique, suggestions, feedback.
Exodus 3:4
Whatever happened on the way to life?
Waiting to finish this or that until
the moment that was then, is now, is gone.
Look closely at your world:
the way the light shines through
the beveled glass,
breaks into prisms and colors
the morning quiet, livens the dew
hidden inside a trembling leaf.
Taste the burst of sweetness
when you bite into a summer plum
or sip the nectar of a lingering kiss.
Listen to the music of your child’s
first word, touch her skin and revel
in the silky texture of her hair.
The scent of rain on steamy earth,
the call of crickets or the mournful murmur
of the dove, do not ignore them.
Your senses call and you respond,
like Moses,“Here I am.”
Uncover the presence of the divine.
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visit poets back if you can..
hope that you enjoyed week 27…
Rally week 28 will be on September 9,
welcome then
awards for you,
check out other stuff there. it is an old post, u may already saw it, but in case you did not know, welcome to explore…
😉
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Hi, Ji, I’m doing my best to “return visits” and enjoying it. Because I’m in the process of revising my second novel and preparing it for submission, I did the first 18 on Friday and then will do a few a day. I learned a few new things re: blogging today so should be able to post awards and send you links now! See, you can teach an old dog new tricks!
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wonderful.
see me on http://loveamongotherthings.wordpress.com/
cheers
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yes…seize the day! really nice. thank you.
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Thank you…I love your avatar.
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Very well written.. I sense a winner possibly 🙂
I also agree with what siubhan said. The last line being ‘Here I am’ would be the perfect ending to this.
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Thank you!
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Hi Victoria, nice to come across your work. I really liked the opening of this piece; there’s definitely something in the wording of that first verse that reminds me of my Catholic upbringing, and in a good way 🙂 and it is mirrored nicely with the allusion to Moses at the end. I kind of wish, though, that the order of the last 3 lines were switched up so that the “Here I am” were the last words in the piece. It’s such a powerful, powerful line.
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Great idea, Siubhan. Thanks for the idea. Victoria
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nice poem.
The three liners could be viewed as individual haiku
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Thanks…hadn’t thought of that.
Victoria Ceretto-Slotto liv2day@charter.net http://liv2write2day.blogspot.com/ https://liv2write2day.wordpress.com
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grab the moment! dont let it go 🙂
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You got it!
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Beutiful, I had to go back and read it a further 3 times. Thank you
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Thanks so much. Have a nice weekend.
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poignant words expressed beautifully through verse 🙂
my entry for the rally is The Butterfly Lover 🙂
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Thank you. I’ll stop by…I’m a butterfly lover!
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you express yourself beautfuly. the images you paint with your words are vivid. very nice!
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Thank you so much.
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I love this poem, and I especially like your verb choices: breaks into prisms and livens the dew. Not many people use this form of enliven and it is a wonderful form – perfect for dew.
Not being a bible reader, I totally lost the allusion to Moses; I found it distracted me from the poem, wondering suddenly about the poet rather than the message of the words. Looks like I’d better do some studying up!
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Thanks for the good feedback. You’re a valuable reviewer. Hope to hear more from you in the future.
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very nice!
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Thank you Jessica.
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Lovely words. Welcome to Thursday Poetry Rally. I’m glad you enjoyed my blog, I enjoyed yours.
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Thanks so much–I appreciate the welcome.
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Wow…. what a beautiful poem… loved it..
have a gr8 week…
viva la vida 🙂
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Thanks for the encouraging words…viva la vida–I like it!
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Lovely poem reminds of how from time to time I’d notice that my son was growing up when he was little…
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Thank you so much, Dabir.
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This is a beautiful poem. I have nothing else to say. It carries you through with so much lightness and detail. It does, somehow, beg you to look into the wonderment of life.
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This brings me back to the importance of the moment..your poem is beautiful, grounding, and lush!
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Beautiful words and photo to go along with. The message is something to think about.
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Thanks for your kind words. Your poem and site are inspiring as well.
Victoria
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Thanks for your kind words as well. Have a wonderful weekend, Victoria.
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Very beautiful words xx
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Thanks for your kind words. Victoria
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What a fine introduction to you and your work, Victoria.
Lovely poem … can’t think of a way to improve it. Well wrought. Sincere.
Bravo!
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Hello,
I already have you poem submitted in my post…
simply TYPE this poem is for Thursday Poets Rally Week 27 is enough…
many thanks!
let me know if you have further questions…
after you are done visiting, leave me a comment, u r well and in god shape.
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beautiful!
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